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BURN THIS

by ~GetYourGrip

does
a

does it
a boy

does it make
a boy who

does it make you
a boy who needs

does it make you sad,
a boy who needs love
and denies needing anyone?


may you breathe
  the ashes of
     words by
     a no one

  and sleep with
       *stars*
  on your tongue



                    print this
                    burn this
             hold it to your skin
                   til the pain
                 hits your veins
              and rub my love in
:icongetyourgrip:
i'm dead fucking serious.

it's the closest i'll get
to keeping you warm
for the winter.

i'm not trying to be pretty.

-----

Daily Deviation?

'bout damn time! haha
nah, i'm really grateful, guys. it humbles me. truly.
thank you everyone who favourites and appreciates this,
and even bigger thanks to ^LadyLincoln and *ChloroformBoy
i'm just glad you picked one i kinda like, haha.
peace, love, and heaven above, everybody :peace:

Daily Deviation

Given 2009-12-17
~GetYourGrip's poem BURN THIS says a great deal, just in the few beginning lines; it certainly will not let you go, once it has 'gripped' you, so to speak. (Suggested by *ChloroformBoy and Featured by `LadyLincoln)
:iconmymusicmylife12:
~mymusicmylife12 Apr 8, 2010
this is really amazing. im glad you got the daily dev ^^

at first, at the end, i thought it said: "may you breathe and sleep with the ashes of *stars*, words of a no one, on your tongue" ha...well great job anyway dude

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screw this! im goin' to friggin' wonderland!! *jumps down random hole*

ヽ(`Д´)ﾉ RAWR <<doh shiz......
:iconrepetition616:
~Repetition616 Mar 13, 2010
THIS IS A MASTERPIECE.

I love it...

--
The jaw is the best tool to grasp philosophical knowledge
:iconlostsoul330:
Mood: Joy ~LostSoul330 Feb 6, 2010
I like this.
:iconjigglypuffy:
~jigglypuffy Jan 8, 2010
This is so perfect in an imperfect way. It has all the broken feelings to make a truly brilliant piece of art. I wish I could find better words for it than that.

--
My mind is my journal, your mind is my easel.
:iconyearning-1:
~yearning-1 Dec 18, 2009
@o@

--
.／l、
(ﾟ､ ｡ ７ < (Meow);
.l、 ~ヽ
.じしf_,)ノ
:iconrubydawg:
~Rubydawg Dec 18, 2009
o so emo and touching ^_^
:iconlove-runner:
!love-runner Dec 17, 2009
I
I love
I love this.
I love this a great deal.
I love this a great deal. Keep up the beautiful work. =)

--
"If we don't walk hand in hand in this life time, then we will walk hand in hand next life time."
-Me
:iconemoaxellover:
=EmoAxelLover Dec 17, 2009
I really love the last stanza (and the bolding and formatting really adds effect). 83

--
Co-owner of:#Team-Phancyhive
"You do not have a soul. You are a soul. You have a body." - C.S. Lewis
:iconsomuchluv:
=somuchluv Dec 17, 2009
I think you should have included the third line in the progression of words. Like:
does it
a boy
and denies

but other than that I loved it.
Especially the different types of.. formatting, I guess. Left, center, off center. :nod:

--
I've nudged my way into your life,
and you've nudged your way into my heart. :heart:
:iconniedec:
~niedec Dec 17, 2009
An excellent concept, but much like the feelings of the speaker of the poem, it comes across as struggling and incomplete. Great idea, but there is so much more that could be done to it.

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"I try not to let my schooling interfere with my education."

-Mark Twain